Wednesday, January 20, 2016

Week 1 Storytelling: The Young Boy Who Never Missed his Parents Goodnight


        
When Little Fred was called to bed,
He always acted right;
He kissed Mamma, and then Papa,
And wished them all good night.

He made no noise, like naughty boys,
But gently upstairs
Directly went, when he was sent,
And always said his prayers.

(Traditional Story)


There was once a boy who was the pride and joy or his parents. He was always a well behaved child. He would never miss his mother and father’s goodnight kiss. After his usual routine he would make his way directly back up to his room and lay to rest. One day after school the boy decided to go to the park and play a game of basketball with his friends. He made sure to tell his parents about his whereabouts. The young boy and his buddies were so engaged in the game that they did not realize they were going past their curfew. As soon as they realized how late it was they all took off to their homes. Unfortunately, the young boy lived the furthest from the park. He decided to take a short cut, which he always avoided for its suspicious appearance. While running across the alley the boy heard a strange noise coming from behind a bush. The young boy curious about the noise, looked over the bush and saw a little puppy. The puppy had a tag with his owner’s address. The young boy knew the location on the tag and decided to rush and drop it off before going home. As he was walking up the steps of the house the door suddenly opened.
Boy playing with puppy: Pixabay
 The young boy decided to walk in. As he walked in he stumbled onto a cat. The cat frightened the young boy because it sounded as if it had told the boy “hello”. The boy could not believe what he heard so he followed the cat to a room and the cat started to laugh. The boy entered the room and he noticed that there were two adult aged dogs crying. He approached the dogs and they, as well as the cat greeted the young boy. The boy amazed about what he was experiencing showed the puppy to the cat and dogs and they immediately jumped in happiness to see the puppy. From behind the boy a man approached him. The young boy scared about who this man was began to apologize about entering his house. The man told the boy he was not upset he began to tell the young boy about the gift he noticed he had when he was a young boy. The man noticed he had the power to give animals the ability to speak. The conversation went on and on. The boy realized it was extremely late and decided to go back home. The boy made it back home just in time before his dad drove out to look for him. The parents happy that the boy made it back home kissed him good night and the boy ended his day in his usual prayer.

Authors Note. The actual story explains a boys usual bed time routine. I added a twist in the story by including his encounter with something magical and mysterious. I got my idea from the story of Alice and Wonderland where the young girl accidentally stumbles onto something magical. I chose to add a similar twist to my story where the boy also accidentally came across a mysterious man who was like no other. He also encountered things that are far from the normal everyday experiences. 

Bibliography. A song from the Nursery Rhythm Book which was edited by Andrew Lang and illustrated by Leslie Brook. Line 120.


4 comments:

  1. Hi Alexis!
    That is one of the cutest stories! The twist you put on the plot with meeting a magical strange man made the story way better than the original which was not too shabby to begin with. I am glad that nothing bad happened to the little boy or the animals which I was immediately worried about in the beginning of the story. I wonder though, does the little boy tell his parents or anyone else about the magical guy and the talking animals?

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  2. I love the way you structured your story! Placing the original nursery rhyme at the beginning set up my expectations for a really quaint, simple story, and the beginning made it seem like that's where you were going -- but then that twist right in the middle was so creative! My favorite thing is that it ended just like the nursery rhyme, like even after the fantastic things that had happened, the boy decided to maintain his same old routine. So cute!

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  3. Alexis!

    This was really a great retelling of parts of the Ramayana. I like how you condensed a large chunk of this complex epic into one relatively short blog post. I notice, like me, you use a lot of descriptive words to depict the scenes and characters throughout your story. I feel it helps the reader know exactly how to visualize the story. As for font and font size, I think it is easily readable. I would suggest maybe cutting your paragraphs into smaller chucks so the reader doesn’t feel overwhelmed at a “compacted” blog pos. The picture you chose was really a great one, that clearly depicted one of the scenes you were talking about in your story! Maybe you could put in in between paragraphs so the readers can visualize the scene you are talking about. All in all, I loved your story and how you were able to summarize a large part of the Ramayana so well!

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  4. Alexis!
    I really like the way you put the original story at the beginning of your post. I liked being able to see the root of your story before I even started reading. I also like that you added a magical element to the story. I thought it made it very exciting.

    Looking forward to reading more from you!

    -Sara

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