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| Vultures Flying which Resemble Jatayu and Sampati: Raptors and Owls |
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed getting to read your introduction into your Storybook. Not many people are doing a storybook so I am glad that I get to read your take on Jatayu and Sampati Also, I liked how you made your storybook into a story of a Dad telling the stories his student have written. I think it is a unique way to convey the stories from the epics that we have read this semester. I enjoyed how you will write about brothers and their connection to each other. I feel it will provide a great dynamic to each of your different stories. I am pretty sure the Vali and Sugriva are brothers and not Hanuman and Sugriva but I am not 100 percent sure. All of these characters get really confusing so maybe check into that just to make sure because I barely know the genealogy of the characters lol. Overall though, I think the idea of the brothers being your main topic in your storybook is a fantastic idea and I am curious to read more!
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your introduction. I had a difficult time finding your storybook introduction. I am not doing a storybook so I am not familiar with how you labeled things. Even though I am doing a portfolio, I am excited to see how your storybook comes along. You have a creative way to tell your story. It will be interesting to read about the dynamics of the brothers. Good luck on your writing!
Great introduction Alexis! This is a great start to your storybook! I like how all of the animals are so closely connected. The father of this family is teaching bird like birds as well as monkeys. This seems like a very tight knit family, and the parents seem to really do a good job of raising their kids to be unselfish and love one another. I think this is key in order for kids to grow up to become good people. Parenting is such a big factor in a child’s life. I can’t wait to see where you go with this next. I don’t know exactly how the storybooks work because I am doing the portfolio, but I am guessing that you start writing stories that focus on the characters mentioned in your introduction. I think these will be a lot of fun as I like the family that you have mentioned.
ReplyDeleteAlexis,
ReplyDeleteWhat a great idea to focus your stories on. Brothers and their interactions are central to many of the stories we have read so far, you will not lack for content to pull ideas from. I also like how you are choosing to tell the stories, a father explaining the importance of brotherhood to his sons provides a great opportunity for you to give meaning and context to the stories of the brothers. I also like how you are covering brotherhood as an idea of camaraderie, and not just strictly the bonding of siblings. Brotherhood is so much more than just blood related family, its an idea and actions undertaken that extend far beyond family members and allies.
Thanks so much for sharing what you have done so far . I look forward to reading more of your work this semester, good luck with the remainder of your writing.
Andrew
Hi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your introduction to you storybook! I think it is a great idea for the father to read the stories to his children to help them learn valuable lessons. It not only makes it easy to continue form story to story, but also allows you to talked about the lessons that were learned from each story in order to teach the children. I am interested to see what principles the father thinks are most important for his children to learn. I also liked how you gave some prelude into what stories you will be telling. This give the reader some excitement if they are familiar with one of the stories, but you also give just enough teasing details to make those who are unfamiliar with the story want to read more. Great job! Thanks for sharing!
Hey Alexis,
ReplyDeleteIt looks like your storybook is heading in a really great direction! I just wish you had a link to this comment wall somewhere, as it can be a hassle to track down. Anyway, that aside, I will definitely be returning to read your future stories. I love how your stories are about not just brother, but about animal brothers. I think that definitely adds something special to your storybook.
My one point of contention is that I am confused about the apparent conflict between ancient and modern. The husband is a retired OU counselor whose students are animals from Indian epics? And his sons are Yudhistira and Bhima? It just seems to be a confusing patchwork of themes. I'm not sure where the coherence is, it just doesn't make sense to me taken as a whole. But I definitely think all the right elements are there, just tie them together a little more clearly!
Hey Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you set up this storybook. I think having the father be a former OU counselor makes it feel close to home, as well as setting up the stories on how he taught brothers to get along.
I am really interested in seeing how the different stories unfold – I have read a little bit about both sets of brothers (birds and monkeys), but am curious as to how you frame it with this storytelling style.
I liked the picture of the bird, but I think it could fit better if you made it a tad smaller. Also, you might look into editing the navigation panel so that the intro is not a subdivision of “Brothers in the Animal Kingdom”.
I really enjoyed your introduction, and am looking forward to getting to read more about the brothers!
I'm from the Myth and Folklore class but I decided to read your storybook! And I'm glad I did. I really enjoyed the introduction and how it vividly set the stage for the dad to tell the stories to his boys. You may check on the formatting of the type on your intro page, for me it was a little wonky and some words were bigger and bolder than others, making it harder to read. Besides that, I liked the picture of the vulture bird things. Then I also read your first story, it was super interesting. I was not familiar with the original story so the changes in the setting and character that you made seemed totally fitting to me. I like that you kept the morals in play for the story. I think those are really important ones that we could all benefit from hearing/reading every once in a while. I would suggest another round of proofreading but besides that your story was really well written!
ReplyDeleteThis is a cool song in the trance beat type music world. I can definitely see someone getting a groove and workout to this. It has a strong swift beat to move to. It also has some humor. It was pretty funny to realize that the words were talking on facebook, talking about facebook. Humor always is a good release.
ReplyDeleteAlexis, I am so glad that you included this music video into your comment wall!!! I love Trap City music and regularly listen to their different music on Youtube. Trap music is so unique and different to listen to. I love their trap queen by Fetty Wap remix on Youtube. Sharing music with other people is such a cool way thing to share with other people. A great majority of the music, artists, bands or just songs that I love now have been introduced to me by other people. Thank you for sharing this with us!
ReplyDeleteAlexis,
ReplyDeleteI was expecting a music video but this is so nice!! I love beats like this but I do not hear a lot of them very often. I can see why it gets you pumped before a game. I feel like I should start listening to this before I go to exercise physiology so it can get me ready for the class haha! It’s so unique but definitely upbeat. Loved it!!
Hey Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI usually do not listen to this genre of music when I turn on my radio, however, I enjoy listening to it when I hear it while I’m out and about. This song is just one example of how music has transformed and grown over the decades. The use of synthesizers and electronic keyboards has grown predominate in all genres of music, such as R&B, rap, alternative, and especially movie compositions. Initially when I heard this song, it energized me and thought it would be good to listen to while running.
Hi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI was excited to be assigned another Storybook -- I think yours is only the second I've looked at this semester, as most people seem to have opted for Portfolios. I like how you frame your stories as letters sent to a counselor and incorporate the images as photos sent by the writers. How you work in an Oklahoma setting is also cool, with the tornado as agent of Sampati's injuries.
Some formatting notes: I noticed lots of run-on sentences that could be broken up with commas for greater ease of reading. Also, at least on my laptop screen, the image for the first story was large enough that the top and bottom edges were cut off.
I thought it was neat that your story focused more on Jatayu and Sampati's backstory rather than on the main plot of the Ramayana. It was quite different to have the main storyline of the epic only alluded to in one paragraph, but refreshing for it not to be the central focus once again.
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteLove the beat you have as your video. I find myself listening to music with no lyrics when I am doing things that require a lot of attention and I am really glad I found your blog! This song makes me want to work out! It would also be perfect for those late nights where you need something blasting in your ears to stay awake!
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ReplyDeleteHey Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed watching and listening the music you posted on your comment wall. I was expecting that to be a video, but that was not the case, but still I watched the entire video. I liked the beat in the music. However, I do not listen to this type of music at all. Nice music and thanks for sharing.
Hi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI must say, I am not typically a fan of trap music, but I really enjoyed this song. A few of my friends are really into this kind of music for workouts and I can see why. Very upbeat and it gets you in the mood to do some high energy stuff! Thank you for sharing your music :)
Hi Alexis! I enjoyed getting to know more of the brotherhood between Jatayu and Sampati because I almost forgot about them. You really have a creative mind when writing your stories. You add very well details and to make the stories come alive you added pictures, which is always a plus. I love the interaction of the Drona talking to his own sons about the lessons he embarked on with his previous ‘patients’. I think your author’s note is very well written because now I can recall what story you were influenced from. I think that using the concept of fighting together as well as standing by the other is good to always teach as well as learn from. Your introduction was my favorite of all because it entitled a setting before the actual climax of the letters. I love how the sons were already in the knowing of their father’s teaching. I can’t wait to come back and see what else has happened!
ReplyDeleteHey Alexis! I really like your music that you posted on your comment wall! It was really cool how you get pumped up to those beats before soccer. I will definitely have to try that before I go on a run next time. Thank you for sharing a different and creative take on the project. I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteI’m not in Indian Epics so I don’t know any of these stories. I chose yours because it had an interesting storybook title and I really like it. I want to say first that I really enjoyed the dialogue. I think dialogue really helps make a story (or a book) more interesting. Your introduction was very interesting; I also like the set up for your story. I also like the fact that the stories are set up as letters to a former professors. I want to clarify that actually, are these former students or patients? You said the husband was a retired counselor but you called the letter writers his students. I’m going to assume the husband was a professor. I also like the fact that you set up what the stories would be about. The story is really good. I particularly like that the story is reinforcing a lesson that the husband wanted his children to learn.
ReplyDeleteI think the approach of having the stories told is letters is great! I read your introduction your storybook, it looks great. It flows together really well. I like the whole concept of brotherhood and always being there for each other. I look forward to reading about the story of the two birds. How one of the brothers injured himself for the other to be safe. It is also great how the father is teaching his boys these lesson through the letters. It couldn't tie together any better! The ending to your introduction also leads the reader to jump right into the next story.
ReplyDeleteI am interested to hear what lessons will come with each of the letters form the fathers past students. It would be rally cool if in the last story instead of a letter one of the students showed up. To actually meet the father and the boys. Or maybe the father could write a letter back to his students.
Hey Alexis! Your introduction was really well done. You incorporated some of the major characters from the epic and right off the bat you put a life lesson in there. I had not realized how much brother to brother conflict there was in Indian Epics but I think it was a smart idea to put the family context as the basis for your storybook. I myself am doing a portfolio so getting to read this is a different and fun experience for me. The story of Sampati and Jatayu was a great first letter to have. It really exemplified what Drona was trying to teach his sons. Jatayu had Sampati's back and never held it against him. Even despite Jatayu's handicaps, they are still great in combat and willing to help one another out. That is true brotherhood right there. Hopefully Drona's sons will learn from the letter the brotherhood is unconditional love and support. Great work so far and I can't wait to read even more stories from your portfolio.
ReplyDeleteI love how creative your storybook is! It's definitely an idea that I wouldn't have thought of, and I feel like its an idea that can keep the reader's interest! I love to be nosy and read letters that other people have written, so this idea is right up my alley. I think it provides enough unity for the stories while still giving each story the opportunity to be independent and add its own information to the storybook. I really liked the first letter. It drew me in immediately, and by the end I definitely felt like I had been in the writer's shoes. Jatayu and Sampan were really interesting left writers, and I'm glad that you gave so much rich detail in the letter. You’ve done a really great job of creating believable characters while still have an interesting plot. I can’t wait to keep up with your storybook this semester!
ReplyDeleteHello Alexis. While I was reading your story I could not help but think how unique the setting was for this type of narrative. I kept wondering what your reasons could have been for making Drona a counselor for Jatayu and Sampati. I wonder what other characters you will be including in your third or even forth letters.
ReplyDeleteI think that you have done a good job in making your storybook unique while promoting a theme of brotherhood, which holds the entire storybook together. Having a common theme across all of your works is the main feature of the storybook so I think that you have been successful thus far in your project.
I suppose that you may be including the Pandavas or even Rama himself into this story. That would be very interesting and you actually have so many options since there is no shortage of characters in the Indian epics to choose from for your letters.
Hi Alexis, I really enjoyed your storybook! It was a fun read. I liked the theme of brotherhood that was all throughout it. I am an only child so I never can fully connect to stories with a strong emphasis on siblings, but I do find them fun to hear/read. It makes me picture how things would be if I were in the same situation. I found your first story, First Letter, very sweet. It reminds me of when I write to my great grandparents to tell them about school and life. It was nice that the one brother took care of the other. It made me smile to see how much they care about each other. I weirdly thought of Sam and Dean from Supernatural when reading it. Not sure why, but it was interesting. The only thing I really noticed while reading the first letter was that this sentence, "We have so much stories to tell you!," might sound better if you say many instead of much. You're doing an amazing job and you should be proud. It was a great read! I hope your semester is going well and keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHi Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI like how you set up the telling of your stories in the introduction by having letters from past students being sent to their former counselor. I also like the brotherhood theme that you chose to use for each story. I was wondering why you chose to make the counselor from OU, but some of his students were animals that were taught combat. Was this just to make the character relatable? Maybe you could say he was a counselor/teacher from a combat school instead.
For the story about Jatayu and Sampati, I thought you did very well in highlighting the dangers of competing to win at all costs. Jatayu's pride forever wounded his brother and he will have to live with that guilt for the rest of his life. I had never read anything about the original story, but I did see that you snuck a portion of the Ramayana in at the end. Who was the friend of Jatayu that helps him rescue the girl? Was it Rama?
Hello Alexis,
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I liked it how in the introduction you talked about the family of two sons, a mother and a retired counselor father from University of Oklahoma. Then the actual story was written in a letter format. Which I think was a nice idea. The thing I liked the most was the details of the entire story. How you were descriptive throughout, for instance, how the incident took place and the brother’s feeling. I felt really bad for Sampati of how he was unable to fly just because his own brother wanted to compete with his own brother. In addition to that, it was sad that he did not listen to Sampati’s suggestion of stopping and going back home. Yes, I do agree that it was a great lesson for brotherhood, I would say not for just brotherhood, but in general we should not try to compare ourselves with one another. Overall, great story.
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful idea! I love your story and the storytelling style that you used here. It is a nice way to connect our present with the idea that Ramayana held. I really liked the way you introduced your story and the characters in it. The picture that you used as a reference was great. I was impressed with the way you included the picture in the dialogue. It made the whole story feel alive. Your connection to the theme of the story and the connection you made it to Oklahoma and OU as a whole was an interesting read! Your story was easy to follow, very simple and meaningful. Anyone reading this story would understand the meaning behind your story easily.
I wish you all the best for your future stories and hope to read more awesome stories like this form you. I wonder who the next letter would be from. Good luck!
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ReplyDeleteAlexis!
ReplyDeleteI'm on your comment wall to check in with you! Even though I just saw you this morning at our 8am class. Thanks for helping me catch up with notes by the way! Couple more weeks of school and we'll be done! We can do it! Also you should post more songs with awesome beats on your wall. I really enjoy them!
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the first story I read! I like the way you captured the epic. I did have one major confusion. Is Drona and his wife and children supposed to be birds or humans? I know the two brothers are obviously birds but I couldn’t tell that about the family. I did however, like the way you portrayed brotherhood in the birds. That is really selfless of the brother to never blame the other for his injuries and didn’t let it get him down. I know I would feel terrible about something like that, who wouldn’t?
I do have a quick suggestion. Maybe try increasing your font size. The text was really hard to read. Especially in the large paragraphs. So I would either try making the font bigger or spacing out your paragraphs a little but more. Just so it is a little easier to read.
Great Job!
Alexis!
ReplyDeleteI just got to read your introduction and the first story of your storybook. I really like how your introduction sets a nice tone for the rest of the project. I already have a sense of the style your writing would be so I was able to get in the right mindset. Your choice of picture for the introduction page was also great! Your first story kept me interested from beginning to end. You were able to use so many details to paint a really clear picture of the brothers flying and getting into a bit of trouble with the tornado. Although I was sad to learn that one of the brothers lost his ability to fly and see, you were able to portray the lesson learned from that experience. They must always be there for each other no matter what. Great story and I will hopefully get to come back and read more of your stories! Great job!
Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI remember reading your introduction and first story a while back, so I decided to come back and see how the rest of the storybook came along. I am glad that you decided to stick with the theme of letters from past students of Drona. I think this is a great way to succinctly show what the students have been up to after they’re training with Drona had ended. I just finished reading the last story where you had all of your characters finally together. I love that you decided to include Kumbhakarna as one of the main villains in the conclusion. He is such an interesting character! You blended aspects of many stories into this tale quite beautifully. I also like the picture that you chose, because it shows the destruction that the awful giant, Kumbhakarna was capable of. Using Gandhari was also very clever, although I would have liked a little dialogue as to what Drona said to make her change her mind. You have created a great project here, and it was a pleasure reading it.