Thoughts about comments

         When reading the comments left in my introduction I was pleased to hear all the good things people said about me. If you ever have a bad day its actually really good to read the nice things people have to say about you. I like how every one who commented pointed out about my pigeon hobby. Animals are one of my favorite things in the world and I love how people were able to notice. I feel like when I comment on other people’s page I have to really focus on things they speak passionately about. It really shows that you care about what they said about themselves. I also like how people asked questions it shows interest! I actually haven’t asked questions on people’s blog but I want to start to actually be more engaged. The format of the comments also need to grab a person’s attention. For example, when there is paragraphs and indentations it makes me feel like they actually left a sincere comment if they took the time to format it correctly.
           In the storytelling comments I received very good feedback. For example, I was told I should space out my stories rather than having one HUGE paragraph. Which honestly I am also discouraged when I have to read one large bulky story. I am actually separating my stories and making them more engaging. I also need to work on my images. I should add more image comments and my own comments should focus on the images. Which I rarely comment on. Overall, I have had extremely great advice and I will make improvements to my own comments

Storytelling Week 5: Family Dispute on Live TV!

The story will take place in a talk show where families discuss their issues on live TV. The families in todays show will be the Panduvas and the Kauravas. They have been having many disputes especially with their cousin Duryodhana. The show goes on air in 1,2,3. LIVE!

Host: Okay let’s welcome these two families!

Audience: (Audience begins to clap and yell)

Host: Okay so let’s begin with you Pandu (Panduva’s dad). What can you start of with?

Pandu: Well let me just say that this family is full of hatred towards us because they hate that we are kinder and more successful people. They cannot stand it and decide to take it out on my wife, children, and my daughter in law. I am currently cursed for killing a sage. I’m worried that this is why my children have problems with these people.

Host: What do you have to say Dhritarashtra (Kauravas’ dad)?

Dhritarashtra: Well I’m not sure but these kids have to have done something to my poor child Duryohana. All I hear him say is how much those Panduva kids get on his last nerve.

Host: So let me introduce a new member to the stage. Drona will you please come in. So Drona, I have heard that you are the teacher who has taught both group of boys how to fight and live in the hard wilderness. Is this true? (Drona enters. Crowd cheers.)

Drona: Yes, it is true.

Host: I also heard it is because of you that Bhima meet Draupadi.

Drona: Yes, this is also true. Instead of paying me with money for training the Panduvas I asked them to help me take her out but as you can see that back fired. At the time of battle Bhima feel in love and decided to marry this woman. I can’t say that I agree but what can I say?

Host: Bhima (one of the Panduva brothers) how do you come into this conflict?

Bhima: Well let me just start of by saying how much I hate the Kaurava’s especially Duryodhana. Those good for nothing people tried to kill my brothers,mother, and me. They set fire to our house!

Duryodhana: You deserved it!

Bhima: Shut up! You better hope I find Draupadi!

Host: Woah! Calm down!

Bhima: Any way me and my brothers had to live in the woods for awhile and one day Duryodhana decided to approach us and challenge us to a game of dice. I am a man of luck so I decided why not! He wanted me to place my wife for the bet and so I decided I would but what I did not know was that he had the game rigged!

Duryodhana: HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAH

Bhima: (Jumps over to Duryodhana and they begin to battle on stage!)

Host: STOP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Bhima: So I lost my wife and as a man of my word I had to give her up. I wanted to grab her but I would be cursed by the gods if I did not keep my word. As he was taking my wife away he was taunting me because he saw me cry of anger and sadness. He said to me “Speak and say, thou who dost ever speak truly, hast thou lost thy kingdom and thy brethren and thine own self?”

Duryodhana: Well shut up now let me speak. I decided to challenge them to another game and they lost again so they had to leave once again the kingdom they had rebuilt. He is a man of bad luck if you ask me!

(The Panduvas stand up and initiate a brawl with the Kauravas)

Host: We will continue our show next week people! Please exit the building immediately!

First Gambling Match: BlogSpot

Author’s note: My story is based on the Public Domain Edition of Mahabharata specifically part A & B. The story speaks of many characters but I decided to mainly focus on the hatred between the Panduvas and Kauravas because I feel like lots of the action was portrayed into their scenes. I begin by introducing the father of both set of brothers because I feel like that’s where the conflict begins. There is one specific character in the Kauravas who has it against the Panduvas and that’s Duryodhana. He is jealous because of their success. He first burns the palace where the Panduva’s and their mother live. Drona did teach them to fight and live in the wilderness so their mother and the boys lived in the woods for a while. Drona did ask the brothers to help him defeat a female deity that Bhima did love for while. Draupadi was actually the wife of a different Panduva brother but Bhima loved her as well and was the only one willing to fight for her. The other brother, Yudhisthira, was actually the one who lost her in the dice game and it was his lose also that caused them to get exiled from the new kingdom the Panduvas had built. The quote in my story was actually said to Yudhisthira because he wasn’t doing a thing while Duryodhana made her his slave.

Week 5 Reading Diary Continued: Public Domain Edition of Mahabharata

Part B of the Public Domain Edition of the Mahabharata begins with the burning of Queen Kunti and the Pandavas. Prince Vidura sends a miner to the house which saves the lives of Queen Kunti and her children. The whole town believes they have died. I would like to expand about the battle the family encounters in the wilderness. Bhima one of the Pandava brothers battles a beast but he eventually meets Hidimbi. This story also drifts into another story about Nalayani who is a female deity which is known for having five husbands. The story then moves on to multiple characters but I am mainly interested in how Arjuna saves Maya’s life and builds a palace for the Pandavas. The Pandavas over time began to gain lots of power. Duryodhana is still jelouse about all other peoples success going on around him that he decided a plan to take Draupadi,  Yudhisthira’s wife. It was a dice game which was rigged by Duryodhana. Duryodhana won but Vidura refused to willing pass Draupadi down to him. I will also focus on the scene where Bhima curses Duryodhana for having converted Drauoadi into a slave. From my understanding of the story I feel like Yudhisthira does not really care much about his ex wife. In my story I would like to add a specific phrase where Duryodhana taunts Yudhisthira. “Speak and say, thou who dost ever speak truly, hast thou lost thy kingdom and thy brethren and thine own self?” I want to focus on this specific conflict. Yudhisthira again played a game if dice leading to the exile of the Pandavas and Draupadi. 

Panduvas and Draupadi are exiled: BlogSpot

Week 5 Reading Diary: Public Domain Edition of Mahabharata

This reading Diary is over the Public Domain Edition of Mahabharata. These will also be the main scenes I focus on when I have to retell the story. Its starts off with a description of how Vyasa was born. Its interesting to see how his mother came to be! It continues by explaining how Devavrate or Bhishma came to be. His mother was very beautiful and his dad could never speak bad to her. She had eight total but killed the first 7. She wanted to kill the eighth but the father intervened angrily. So the deal between the king and mom was over because he was never to speak bad to her. This child was Devavrate. The king and Vyasa mother then meet but the fisherman (Satyavati’s foster father) did not want her to marry the king because he did not garuntee the throne to the child he would have with Satyavatis. My favorite scenes are battle scenes.  There is an episode where Bhishma take the daughters of a king named Kashi to be the wives of the son that King Shantanu and Satyavati procreated but only two women are allowed to marry Vichitravirya He unfortunately wasnted able to have children so his mother called upon her first son to Vyasa to take care of this issue.  Pandu is a child that has sprout from this encounter and is later cursed for killing a sage. Pandus son’s will eventually come into conflict with the sons of Dhritarashtra, their cousins the Kauravas. Both groups would eventually be taught by the same teacher Drona. After being taught they have to display their moves. Kunti the mother of the Panduvas has another son who comes into battle but the Panduvas do not know that is one of their borthers. As payment for Dronas lessons he wants the “royal boys” to help him bring down Drupada who in my opinion sounds like a childhood bully. This section ends with Duryohana the oldest of the Kauravas wants to kill the Panduvas and their mother.

Panduva Brothers: Wikipedia